Breathe, said the teacher. Breathe and be.
My soul whispered, “Follow me!”
As I sat and breathed, my soul and I walked
As you’d expect, I mostly talked.
“I can’t understand, just can’t cope.”
My soul was quiet – was there hope?
Breathe, said the teacher. Breathe and see.
The child just ahead looked like – me!
The little girl waved me on;
I wondered how long I’d been gone.
We ran up a gentle hill
And saw a brook by the trees so still.
“I remember this stream, where I once sat!”
And after I marveled at that,
I saw my father who’d long since passed:
An angry man found peace at last.
“Never worry,” said my Dad
“It did nothing but made me sad.”
I pondered this, then saw my cat,
And heard his purr – how about that?
I’d forgotten favorite colors, too:
Burgundy and aqua blue,
The perfume I wore to English class,
And my first martini glass!
“It’s all with you, you just forgot,”
My soul chuckled. My face felt hot,
Embarrassed to shed a silly tear.
My soul whispered,
“I’m still here.”
© Judith C Evans 2011
Written for Thursday Think Tank's prompt #76 -- soul's whisper
and posted at Thursday Poets Rally #57
and posted at Thursday Poets Rally #57
Many thanks to Thursday Poets Rally at The Poetry Palace for this award...I am humbled and honored! I nominate NeiNei for the award.
Winter winds blow ice
but poetic souls gather --
encouraging words.
Winter winds blow ice
but poetic souls gather --
encouraging words.
26 comments:
Heartfelt all the way through, the tears prove themselves to be true, eloquently written from the heart. You touch me in ways I've not know for so long.Thank you. You heart smiles, your soul shines. Be blessed.
Aww, thanks, John! This prompt sure took me on a journey!
Wow- this is amazing. I love the wonder in it all.
my soul and I walked
As you’d expect, I mostly talked
The unmistakable ring of truth in this. What was surprising was the way the poem developed thereafter. Still full of truth and feeling, the wonder and the joy took over.
There's a simple beauty in this that I am afraid I don't have the vocabulary to express.
Suffice to say, it is a wonderful read, warm, sad, just full of emotions.
I love the idea of "It's all with you, you just forgot." Truly is such a comfort, and it makes me realize that we should write down as much of it as we can while we still remember. Your poem took me on my own journey. Thank you.
moving and lovely.
It's beautiful with a hint of wistfulness to it. “It’s all with you, you just forgot.” Thank you for taking me on this ride. :)
Happy Rally!
Lovely reflections of the soul...indeed it is still with us ~
http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.com/2011/12/unmeasurable.html
breathe taking,
well done.
I like the thought that it's aall with you. I enjoyed this poem. Very nicely done!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/11/30/the-beast-2/
this is very very touching. I'm so glad to have had you stop by my blog and honored to have read yours.
thanks!
Nicely done... Beautiful reflections.
"breathe and see"that phrase gave the piece rhythm, bringing it back to center, I liked that!
enjoy the rally!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/12/02/faces-and-shadows/
Loved it especially the first 2 lines of your poem. We would do well to follow our souls.
nice post! thanks for sharing... God bless you... loves soraya
Well, Judith, thanks for a good cry, and I mean that in the best way possible. We sang a song in church today called "Breathe," and that's the mindfulness of meditation and prayer. Thank you so much, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/12/02/the-day-i-saw-an-angel-fly-lyrics/
Really beautiful, I loved the journey in it
Judith, congrats on the award and I so loved this writing!
Just beautiful!
Sorry I've not been visiting much.
Getting ready to welcome my first grand baby very soon and helping my daughter with all that need to get done.
That's so beautiful. I wish I was as good at poetry as you are :).
congrats on the well deserved award :)
What a beautiful poem and nicely penned. Congratulations on the award.
well deserved award,
way to go,
welcome back to poets rally again, best wishes.
I love this poem Judith! "Don't worry", said my Dad. "It only made me sad." Very poignant!
Wonderful write...
Congrats on your award~
Like Mary said, this took me on my own journey!
Thank you, Ella! Gosh, I posted this months ago and am so glad you liked it. Have a wonderful weekend!
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