Thursday, December 1, 2011

Soul Whisper

Breathe, said the teacher. Breathe and be.
My soul whispered, “Follow me!”
As I sat and breathed, my soul and I walked
As you’d expect, I mostly talked.

“I can’t understand, just can’t cope.”
My soul was quiet – was there hope?
Breathe, said the teacher. Breathe and see.
The child just ahead looked like – me!

The little girl waved me on;
I wondered how long I’d been gone.
We ran up a gentle hill
And saw a brook by the trees so still.

“I remember this stream, where I once sat!”
And after I marveled at that,
I saw my father who’d long since passed:
An angry man found peace at last.

“Never worry,” said my Dad
“It did nothing but made me sad.”
I pondered this, then saw my cat,
And heard his purr – how about that?

I’d forgotten favorite colors, too:
Burgundy and aqua blue,
The perfume I wore to English class,
And my first martini glass!

“It’s all with you, you just forgot,”
My soul chuckled. My face felt hot,
Embarrassed to shed a silly tear.
My soul whispered,
“I’m still here.”


© Judith C Evans 2011

Written for Thursday Think Tank's prompt #76 -- soul's whisper
and posted at Thursday Poets Rally #57


Many thanks to Thursday Poets Rally at The Poetry Palace for this award...I am humbled and honored! I nominate NeiNei for the award.

Winter winds blow ice
but poetic souls gather --
encouraging words.


  

26 comments:

Anonymous said...

Heartfelt all the way through, the tears prove themselves to be true, eloquently written from the heart. You touch me in ways I've not know for so long.Thank you. You heart smiles, your soul shines. Be blessed.

Judith C Evans said...

Aww, thanks, John! This prompt sure took me on a journey!

Laurie Kolp said...

Wow- this is amazing. I love the wonder in it all.

Dave King said...

my soul and I walked
As you’d expect, I mostly talked

The unmistakable ring of truth in this. What was surprising was the way the poem developed thereafter. Still full of truth and feeling, the wonder and the joy took over.

Anonymous said...

There's a simple beauty in this that I am afraid I don't have the vocabulary to express.
Suffice to say, it is a wonderful read, warm, sad, just full of emotions.

Mary said...

I love the idea of "It's all with you, you just forgot." Truly is such a comfort, and it makes me realize that we should write down as much of it as we can while we still remember. Your poem took me on my own journey. Thank you.

Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry said...

moving and lovely.

Anonymous said...

It's beautiful with a hint of wistfulness to it. “It’s all with you, you just forgot.” Thank you for taking me on this ride. :)

Happy Rally!

Scarlet said...

Lovely reflections of the soul...indeed it is still with us ~

http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.com/2011/12/unmeasurable.html

Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall said...

breathe taking,
well done.

Marbles in My Pocket said...

I like the thought that it's aall with you. I enjoyed this poem. Very nicely done!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/11/30/the-beast-2/

Anonymous said...

this is very very touching. I'm so glad to have had you stop by my blog and honored to have read yours.

thanks!

Becky Sain said...

Nicely done... Beautiful reflections.

Anonymous said...

"breathe and see"that phrase gave the piece rhythm, bringing it back to center, I liked that!
enjoy the rally!

http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/12/02/faces-and-shadows/

Suzy said...

Loved it especially the first 2 lines of your poem. We would do well to follow our souls.

Anonymous said...

nice post! thanks for sharing... God bless you... loves soraya

Anonymous said...

Well, Judith, thanks for a good cry, and I mean that in the best way possible. We sang a song in church today called "Breathe," and that's the mindfulness of meditation and prayer. Thank you so much, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/12/02/the-day-i-saw-an-angel-fly-lyrics/

Anonymous said...

Really beautiful, I loved the journey in it

Margie said...

Judith, congrats on the award and I so loved this writing!
Just beautiful!

Sorry I've not been visiting much.
Getting ready to welcome my first grand baby very soon and helping my daughter with all that need to get done.

WritingsForLife said...

That's so beautiful. I wish I was as good at poetry as you are :).

Blossom Vydrina said...

congrats on the well deserved award :)

The Write Girl said...

What a beautiful poem and nicely penned. Congratulations on the award.

Maggie Patti Barbara Frankford-Walton said...

well deserved award,

way to go,

welcome back to poets rally again, best wishes.

Brenda said...

I love this poem Judith! "Don't worry", said my Dad. "It only made me sad." Very poignant!

Ella said...

Wonderful write...
Congrats on your award~
Like Mary said, this took me on my own journey!

Judith C Evans said...

Thank you, Ella! Gosh, I posted this months ago and am so glad you liked it. Have a wonderful weekend!